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Postby MichaelGD3 » Thu Oct 17, 2019 10:15 pm

Hey everyone, I'm new to this site and after reading such great and well thought out reviews, I decided to join and ask for a little help if I may and if you guys wouldn't mind help me out a little bit. Long story short I am currently in college working on my ADN (Associates Degree In Nursing) and I'm currently in "Public Speaking" went through two speeches already and did not do so good, I was nervous and anxious but I think my nerves are calm and it really doesn't bother me anymore speaking in front of people, which is the good news, now for the not so good news I got an A on my first one, B on second and C on the last, which it has to do with the writing the speech down etc, I am posting this speech here to get some feedback on if its good or not, its a speech to pursue and I chose Exercise as my speaking topic. Thanks for the feedback....

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********** PERSUE PEOPLE TO EXERCISE**********

Research has shown that exercise may be equally as effective as taking certain prescription medications,
And everybody in this room and beyond needs exercise for various reasons but most importantly, it can prove vital for health-related concerns, it has been proven that regular exercise prevents and combats certain health conditions. But theres other reasons you might want to take a jog around your neighborhood. You ever get mad at someone? Or did someone make you feel upset? Exercise improves mood, A gym session or running can help. Physical activity stimulates various brain chemicals that may leave you feeling happier, more relaxed and less anxious. And we all are in college obviously so we all know how it is when we find it difficult to fall asleep sometimes, Regular physical activity can help us fall asleep faster, get better sleep and deepen our sleep. Just don't exercise too close to bedtime, or you may be too energized to go to sleep.
I know I'm qualified to speak upon this topic, due to the fact that I have a few friends that think, watching tv and playing video games all day count as exercise, because they're moving fingers, and I'm sure someone else in this room have or had friends like that.

By now you are most likly wondering how can exercise affect your sleep?
And I'm here to tell you that Exercise can give a boost to sleep, enhance your sleep and improve your stress levels in several ways. Making time to exercise can...

Improve sleep quality. Exercise can contribute to more sound and restful sleep. Physical activity increases time spent in deep sleep, the most physically restorative sleep phase. Deep sleep helps to boost immune function, support cardiac health, and control stress and anxiety. In addition to improving the quality of sleep, exercise also can help you increase the duration of your nightly rest. Being physically active requires you to expend energy, and helps you feel more tired and ready to rest at the end of the day. Research indicates that exercise—in particular, regular exercise that’s part of a consistent routine—can help boost sleep duration, in addition to sleep quality. And not to mention a regular exercise routine can help to reduce your stress levels. Stress is a common cause of sleep problems, including trouble falling asleep and tossing and turning during the night. Exercise is a potent remedy for anxiety and other mood disorders—just 5 minutes of exercise can trigger anti-anxiety responses in the body. Mind-body exercise such as yoga can help quiet the parasympathetic nervous system, which can help you relax. Research shows that mind-body exercises such as yoga and stretching can help to lower cortisol levels and reduce blood pressure, as well as having positive effects on mood and will help you fall asleep quicker.

Exercise is quite vital when it comes to sleep patterns, but excercise can also have a big impact on your mood.

Do you guys ever go for a run to clear your head? Do you walk with friends to decompress, lift weights or do yoga to de-stress? In short, do you exercise to improve your mood? If so, you are on the correct path, according to a growing body of research that shows that exercise can be as effective as medication and psychotherapy in treating mood disorders. For example...

Exercise is a powerful depression fighter for several reasons. Most importantly, it promotes all kinds of changes in the brain which enhances your overall mood, including neural growth, reduced inflammation, and new activity patterns that promote feelings of calm and well-being. It also releases endorphins, powerful chemicals in your brain that energize your spirits and make you feel good. Finally, exercise can also serve as a distraction, allowing you to find some quiet time to break out of the cycle of negative thoughts that feed depression. Additionally, exercise is a natural and effective anti-anxiety treatment. It relieves tension and stress, boosts physical and mental energy, and enhances well-being through the release of endorphins. Anything that gets you moving can help, but you’ll get a bigger benefit if you pay attention instead of zoning out. Furthermore, Exercising regularly is one of the easiest and most effective ways to reduce the symptoms of ADHD and improve concentration, motivation, memory, and mood. Physical activity immediately boosts the brain’s dopamine, norepinephrine, and serotonin levels—all of which affect mood, focus and attention. In this way, exercise proforms in much the same way as ADHD medications such as Ritalin and Adderall.

So the next time we feel depressed because we didn't pass a test, or feel like an anxiety attack is about to be upon us, or if you know someone with ADHD, just remember exercise is a great alternative to medication. But how exactly does exercise play a vital role in the overall health of the human body?

Besides the benefits for mood, ADHD, and sleep reasons as I mentioned a few moments ago, exercise has a huge impact on our overall health. It can have noticeable differences in multiple critical areas regarding our health which include, reducing your chance of having a heart disease, lowering the risk of being diagnosed with high blood pressure and lowers the probability of being identified to have type 2 diabetes and can aslo help manage type 2 diabetes. I will explain...

The old thought was that vigorous exercise could be dangerous to people at risk for heart disease. Emerging evidence suggests that the more vigorous the excercise, the more value to your heart—though short, 15-minute spurts of exercise may be as beneficial as a one marathon session. Exercise helps dilate the body's blood vessels and enables blood to circulate more freely.
In one study Harvard researchers found up to a 20% reduction of heart-disease risk for those who most frequently got vigorous exercise. This category included running or jogging, swimming laps, playing tennis, or doing aerobics.
Walking three miles or more a week resulted in a 10% reduction in risk. Other moderate exercises include walking, golf, and running. But How are high blood pressure and exercise connected? Regular physical activity makes your heart stronger. A stronger heart can pump more blood with less effort. If your heart can proform less to pump, the force on your arteries decreases, lowering your blood pressure.
Becoming more active can lower your systolic blood pressure — the top number in a blood pressure reading — by an average of 4 to 9 millimeters of mercury (mm Hg). That's as good as some blood pressure medications. For some people, getting some exercise is enough to reduce the need for blood pressure medication.
If your blood pressure is at a desirable level — less than 120/80 mm Hg — exercise can help prevent it from rising as you age. Regular exercise also helps you maintain a healthy weight — another important way to control blood pressure.
But to keep your blood pressure low, you need to keep exercising on a regular basis. It takes about one to three months for regular exercise to have an impact on your blood pressure. The benefits last only as long as you continue to exercise. In addition Exercise has so many benefits, but one the most critical ones is that it makes it possible to prevent diabetes by regualting your blood glucose (blood sugar) level. People with type 2 diabetes have too much glucose in their blood, either because their body doesn’t produce enough insulin to process it, or because their body doesn’t use insulin properly (insulin resistant).
In either case, exercise can reduce the glucose in your blood. Muscles can use glucose without insulin when you’re exercising. In other words, it doesn’t matter if you’re insulin resistant or if you don’t have enough insulin: when you exercise, your muscles get the glucose they need, and in turn, your blood glucose level goes down.
If you’re insulin resistant, exercise actually makes your insulin more effective. That is—your insulin resistance goes down when you exercise, and your cells can use the glucose more effectively.
Exercise can also help people with type 2 diabetes avoid long-term complications, especially heart problems. People with diabetes are are likely to develop blocked arteries (heart disease), which can lead to a heart attack or stroke. Exercise helps keep your heart healthy and strong. Plus, exercise helps you maintain good cholesterol—and that helps you avoid high cholesterol and the build up of plaque that may block the blood from passing easily through your arteries.

In Conclusion, I really enjoyed speaking on this topic, and hopefully most of you
will take the information I shared and act upon it, since excercise is great
for your heart, mind and body, the question shouldnt be why should I
excercise, it should be WHEN is the next time I will exercise. Thanks for
listening, and have a wonderful day!
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Postby Richard@DecisionSkills » Fri Oct 18, 2019 1:14 am

I’m not sure what type of feedback you are looking for.

The speech as written is disjointed and not organized very well.

If you wish to improve reach out to other students in the class for help. Form a study group. Let them help you edit and then practice the speech several times.
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Postby littlebrowndragon » Sat Oct 19, 2019 4:42 pm

I've made some suggestions as to how you could improve your speech. They are included in Bold/Underline in a copy of your speech below. They are, of course, only suggestions i.e. ignore any that you do not agree with.

Good luck with the speech.



********** PERSUADE PEOPLE TO EXERCISE**********

Research has shown that exercise may be equally as effective as taking certain prescription medications,

I suggest you say here precisely what health issues exercise is good for e.g. mood, quality of sleep, relaxation, mental health, physical health etc, etc. This will give clues to your audience about what topics you are actually going to talk about


And everybody in this room and beyond needs exercise for various reasons but most importantly, it can prove vital for health-related concerns, it has been proven that regular exercise prevents and combats certain health conditions [ what health conditions? can you name a few?]. But theres other reasons you might want to take a jog around your neighborhood.

New paragraph?

You ever get mad at someone? Or did someone make you feel upset? Exercise improves mood, A gym session or running can help. Physical activity stimulates various brain chemicals that may leave you feeling happier, more relaxed and less anxious. And we all are in college obviously so we all know how it is when we find it difficult to fall asleep sometimes, Regular physical activity can help us fall asleep faster, get better sleep and deepen our sleep. {Perhaps you could describe what exercise you do and when you take it - personal experience is always interesting and useful ] Just don't exercise too close to bedtime, or you may be too energized to go to sleep.


I know I'm qualified to speak upon this topic, due to the fact that I have a few friends that think, watching tv and playing video games all day count as exercise, because they're moving fingers, and I'm sure someone else in this room have or had friends like that. [If you are mentioning this, then can the audience assume that these friends do not sleep well? If they do not sleep well, you could say that you know that they do not sleep well.]

By now you are most likly wondering how can exercise affect your sleep?
And I'm here to tell you that Exercise can give a boost to sleep, enhance your sleep and improve ["reduce" might be a better word to use than "improve"] your stress levels in several ways. Making time to exercise can...

Firstt, Improve sleep quality. Exercise can contribute to more sound and restful sleep. Physical activity increases time spent in deep sleep, the most physically restorative sleep phase. Deep sleep helps to boost immune function, support cardiac health, and control stress and anxiety.

Splitting your speech up into smaller paragraphs is helpful so that when you are speaking, you will be more likely to take a longer pause

Secondly, In addition to improving the quality of sleep, exercise also can help you increase the duration of your nightly rest. Being physically active requires you to expend energy, and helps you feel more tired and ready to rest at the end of the day. Research indicates that exercise—in particular, regular exercise that’s part of a consistent routine—can help boost sleep duration, in addition to sleep quality. And not to mention a regular exercise routine can help to reduce your stress levels.

[New paragraph here. ] Stress is a common cause of sleep problems, including trouble falling asleep and tossing and turning during the night. Exercise is a potent remedy for anxiety and other mood disorders—just 5 minutes of exercise can trigger anti-anxiety responses in the body. Mind-body exercise such as yoga can help quiet the parasympathetic nervous system, which can help you relax. Research shows that mind-body exercises such as yoga and stretching can help to lower cortisol levels and reduce blood pressure, as well as having positive effects on mood and will help you fall asleep quicker.

Exercise is quite ["vital, but not "quite vital" ] vital when it comes to sleep patterns, but excercise can also have a big impact on your mood.

Do you guys ever go for a run to clear your head? Do you walk with friends to decompress? Lift weights or do yoga to de-stress? In short, do you exercise to improve your mood? If so, you are on the correct path, according to a growing body of research that shows that exercise can be as effective as medication and psychotherapy in treating mood disorders. For example...

Exercise is a powerful depression fighter for several reasons. Most importantly, it promotes all kinds of changes in the brain which enhances your overall mood, including neural growth, reduced inflammation, and new activity patterns that promote feelings of calm and well-being. It also releases endorphins, powerful chemicals in your brain that energize your spirits and make you feel good. Finally, exercise can also serve as a distraction, allowing you to find some quiet time to break out of the cycle of negative thoughts that feed depression. Additionally, exercise is a natural and effective anti-anxiety treatment. It relieves tension and stress, boosts physical and mental energy, and enhances well-being through the release of endorphins. Anything that gets you moving can help, but you’ll get a bigger benefit if you pay attention instead of zoning out. [I suggest you explain what you mean by "pay attention" and "zoning out"]


[New para] Furthermore, Exercising regularly is one of the easiest and most effective ways to reduce the symptoms of ADHD and improve concentration, motivation, memory, and mood. Physical activity immediately boosts the brain’s dopamine, norepinephrine, and serotonin levels—all of which affect mood, focus and attention. In this way, exercise proforms in much the same way as ADHD medications such as Ritalin and Adderall.

So the next time we feel depressed because we didn't pass a test, or feel like an anxiety attack is about to be upon us, or if you know someone with ADHD, just remember exercise is a great alternative to medication. But how exactly does exercise play a vital role in the overall health of the human body?

Besides the benefits for mood, ADHD, and sleep reasons as I mentioned a few moments ago, exercise has a huge impact on our overall [physical] health. It can have noticeable differences in multiple critical areas regarding our [physical] health which include, reducing your chance of having a heart disease, lowering the risk of being diagnosed with high blood pressure and lowers the probability of being identified to have type 2 diabetes and can aslo help manage type 2 diabetes. I will explain...

The old thought was that vigorous exercise could be dangerous to people at risk for heart disease. Emerging evidence suggests that the more vigorous the excercise, the more value to your heart—though short, 15-minute spurts of exercise may be as beneficial as a one marathon session. Exercise helps dilate the body's blood vessels and enables blood to circulate more freely.


In one study Harvard researchers found up to a 20% reduction of heart-disease risk for those who most frequently got vigorous exercise. This category included running or jogging, swimming laps, playing tennis, or doing aerobics.
Walking three miles or more a week resulted in a 10% reduction in risk. Other moderate exercises include walking, golf, and running. [You give lots of examples of the types of exercise here. Good.]

But How are high blood pressure and exercise connected? Regular physical activity makes your heart stronger. A stronger heart can pump more blood with less effort. If your heart can proform less to pump, the force on your arteries decreases, lowering your blood pressure.

Becoming more active can lower your systolic blood pressure — the top number in a blood pressure reading — by an average of 4 to 9 millimeters of mercury (mm Hg). That's as good as some blood pressure medications. For some people, getting some exercise is enough to reduce the need for blood pressure medication.

If your blood pressure is at a desirable level — less than 120/80 mm Hg — exercise can help prevent it from rising as you age. Regular exercise also helps you maintain a healthy weight — another important way to control blood pressure.
But to keep your blood pressure low, you need to keep exercising on a regular basis. It takes about one to three months for regular exercise to have an impact on your blood pressure. The benefits last only as long as you continue to exercise.


Exercise has so many benefits, but one the most critical ones is that it makes it possible to prevent diabetes by regualting your blood glucose (blood sugar) level. People with type 2 diabetes have too much glucose in their blood, either because their body doesn’t produce enough insulin to process it, or because their body doesn’t use insulin properly (insulin resistant).
[No need for a new para here] In either case, exercise can reduce the glucose in your blood. Muscles can use glucose without insulin when you’re exercising. In other words, it doesn’t matter if you’re insulin resistant or if you don’t have enough insulin: when you exercise, your muscles get the glucose they need, and in turn, your blood glucose level goes down.
If you’re insulin resistant, exercise actually makes your insulin more effective. That is—your insulin resistance goes down when you exercise, and your cells can use the glucose more effectively.

Exercise can also help people with type 2 diabetes avoid long-term complications, especially heart problems. People with diabetes are are likely to develop blocked arteries (heart disease), which can lead to a heart attack or stroke. Exercise helps keep your heart healthy and strong. Plus, exercise helps you maintain good cholesterol—and that helps you avoid high cholesterol and the build up of plaque that may block the blood from passing easily through your arteries.


{To conclude, I have outlined the many benefits to people's overall health of taking exercise. That is, excercise is great for your heart, mind and body } Hopefully most of you will take the information I shared and act upon it.

The question shouldnt be why should I excercise, it should be WHEN is the next time I will exercise. [Good way to end. It has impact]

[I think this last sentence spoils the impact of the one above. Perhaps miss this one out?] I really enjoyed speaking on this topic. Thanks for listening, and have a wonderful day!
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Postby MichaelGD3 » Sat Oct 19, 2019 4:50 pm

Aw man, thanks so much for taking the time to do that for me :) I really appreciate it lots my friend!!!! Have a blessed day
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